Some people say the cars should be banned from the centers of cities. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, cities
has
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showed
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a significant increase in
cars
, and
this
resulted in environmental
realated
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related
problems
such
as
air
pollution
and traffic congestion. It is believed by some
people
that
cars
should be prohibited from
city
centers
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. In my opinion,
i
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agree with limiting the
numbers
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number
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of private
cars
in
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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and
promoting
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encouraging
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people
to use
the
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public
transport
. First and foremost, in recent years
cars
showed a
noticable
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noticeable
notable
expansion in
number
.
Due to
this
significant increase in the
number
of vehicles, emitting carbon dioxide
to
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the
enivronment
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environment
causing
air
pollution
.
Therefore
, there is a negative impact on our
health
due to
pollution
. It is expected that after approximately 50 years
people
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health
will not be able to
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this
health related
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problems caused by
air
pollution
.
Secondly
, traffic congestion is a serious problem that should be considered, and
moreover
,
transport
delays mainly during rush hours.
City
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center
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centre
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is the main road that
connect
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the
city
to any other place having
this
road packed with
cars
can
cause
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a knock-on effect on public
transport
.
This
result
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results
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in
people
being late
from
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work and
schools
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school
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and
this
can increase the level of unemployed individuals in
this
city
and
reducing
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the
economical
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status.
A research
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was
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carried
in
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United
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the United
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Kingdom
during
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2010,
this
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showed that reducing the
number
of private
vehicle
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vehicles
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in
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on
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roads and increasing the
number
of public
transport
reduced both
air
pollution
and
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the cost
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of parking and fuel used by
the
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private car owner. In conclusion,
prohibting
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prohibiting
private
cars
and encouraging
people
to use public
transport
is a very good method to preserve both money and
health
. I strongly agree with the idea of
bannding
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banning
banding
blending
car
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cars
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in central areas to ease the
transport
way for
other
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others
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to reach to
desired
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destenation
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destination
.
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