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thr table and the charts below give information the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in a one area of Britain. the table shows where the money vame from and the chart shows how it was distributed

thr table and the charts below give information the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in a one area of Britain. the table shows where the money vame from and the chart shows how it was distributed
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The given table and piece chart illustrate the financial situation and the proportion expended by the police in each area of the United Kingdom between 2017 and 2018. The general overview here is that, over time, in 2018, there has been a significant increase in the financial situation of the budget of 318.6
million
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pounds
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.
However
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, in 2017, the percentages of money the cops expended were earning.
According to
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 the data, in 2017, in each area of the group,
such
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 as national government, local taxes and Other places, there were most popular financial situations,
such
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 as 175.5, 91.2, and 38
million
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pounds
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 the ratio was 304.7
million
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pounds
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,
However
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, In 2018, the proportion of allocation were elite
such
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 as 177.8, 102.3 and 38.5
million
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pounds
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,
moreover
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, the ratio was 318.6
million
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pounds
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.
Furthermore
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, in 2017, the percentage of expenditure in each group by constable increased dramatically,
such
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 as earning, building and transport,
In contrast
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, In 2018, the proportion of allocation expended increased, as essential as at earning, building and transport.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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