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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
#information #ages #populations #yemen #projections
The diagrams show
statistic
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statistical
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 information regarding the ages of the
habitants
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inhabitants
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 of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and
also
a
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an
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estimative
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estimate
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 for 2050. We can see that in 2000 the majority of
people
 in Yemen
was
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were
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 between 0 and 14
years
 old,
whith
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with
which
 50.1%,
whereas
 in Italy most of the population was between 15- 59
years
 old (61.6%, in the same year.
On the other hand
, just 3.6% of
people
 in the former country
was
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were
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 60
years
 old or
more
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older
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 in 2000,
while
 in the latter
country
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country,
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this
 figure is represented
with
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by
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 241%. The projections for 2050 show that the number of
people
 with 15-59
years
 and 60
years
 or more will increase in Yemen, reaching 57.3% and 5.7% respectively.
In contrast
, in Italy, the population with 15-59
years
will
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old will
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 decrease to 46.2%,
while
people
 with 60
years
 or more will grow to 42.3%
Overall
, it is possible to see that there is an upward trend
on
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 the rates of
people
 with 60
years
 or more in both countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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