Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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hobbies
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hobbies
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people
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people
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therefore
, should not be so demanding to follow. Since, nowadays, Linking Words
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people
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activities
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For example
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activities
, the levels of their energy will dramatically drop; Use synonyms
subsequently
, they are less likely to concentrate on their professions.
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instead
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For instance
, if the running instructors take the first and beginner levels of running, hard on Linking Words
people
, they will lose their interest in perpetuating that field.
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