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thw graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

thw graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The graph illustrates the proportion of residents who lived in urban environments from four Asia countries (Philippines,
Malaysia
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,
Thaliand
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Thailand
 and
Indonesia
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) between 1970 and 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, it can be seen that four countries
climb
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have climbed
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 up from 1970,
while
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Malaysia
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 is
hoing
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hoping
going
 to
reaches
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reach
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peak
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a peak
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 in 2040.
Furthermore
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,
Indonesia
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is
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was
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 second highest in 2040, before it started at the lowest point in 1970. The percentage of
Indonesia
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 is around 12% in the beginning and
then
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 sharply
rise
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rises
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 to 60% in 2040.
Whereas
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,
Malaysia
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 takes first place
in
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apply
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most of the time but
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 surpassed
Malaysiain
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Malaysia
 in 1970 and 1990, after 1990
Malaysia
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 strongly
increase
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increased
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 and
reaches
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reached
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 its peak at 80% in 2040, with it
started
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starting
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 at 30%. In terms of
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, it rapidly decreased at around 50% to 40 % from 1990 to 2010, and later
become
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became
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 the third one in 2040 with
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a gradually
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gradually grow
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gradual growth
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at
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of
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 50%.
Thaliand
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Thailand
 started at just about 20%,
become
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becoming
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 the lowest
spoy
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spot
 in 2040 at 45%, after surpassing
by
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apply
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Indonesia
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 in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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