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The maps show the changes that happened to an island called Paradise

The maps show the changes that happened to an island called Paradise
#maps #show #changes #island #paradise
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There are two maps which are named ‘Before’ and ‘After’ illustrate the changes
of
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in
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 Paradise
Island
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 to provide
for
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apply
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tourists
some
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with some
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 recreational areas.
Overall
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, the dramatic changes in
new
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a new
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 map of
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Island
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the Island
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 like building some places to
absorb
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encourage
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 people to come
to
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apply
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there. Obviously, in the past, there
was
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were no
any
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apply
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buildings
in
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on
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 Paradise
Island
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.There were just some trees in
northern
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the northern
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 and southern parts of
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Island
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the Island
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 and no facilities to access
to
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there. In
new
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the new
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 map, it can be seen that many
accomadations
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accommodations
 were constructed for tourists to take a rest there.A
repection
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reception
 building .All of
places
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the places
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 were connected
with
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by
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 footpaths.Just
pier
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the pier
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,reception and restaurant
which
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were linked with vehicle tracks.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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