The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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In terms of physical appearance, characteristics of the
island
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around
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250 by 80 meters and
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is surround
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surround
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by the sea. On the
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westside,
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westside
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west side
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there is
sandy
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a sandy
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small
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apply
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sandy beach and in the middle of
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island
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the island
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have
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a large flat area. With reference to vegetation on the left
side
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side,
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there are palm trees
stick
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together but towards the east
side
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there is a group of numerous coconut trees. The second map describes the changes that are made to develop tourism. There have been two key types of improvement
achieve
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to achieve
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this
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purpose.
The first
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they upgrade by
build
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building
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reception
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a reception
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and accommodation
restaurant
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restaurants
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connect to the resort. The second on the beach
have
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swimming
sailing
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and sailing
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recreation.
Beside
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encouraging sailing as a sport, the pier
also
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makes it easier to access
to
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the resort. In my own opinion, I believe
with
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the improvements will make many visitors
interesting
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interested
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this
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in this
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island
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and want to come to stay here. That will make
this
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island
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economy expand.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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