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The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given map illustrates possible areas, where a shopping
centre
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 could be built in
the
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Brandfield
city
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. As it might be seen, there are only two of them. The map points
only
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 4 big places that may surround the mall,
such
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 as Golf Course and park, Housing
Estate
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,
City
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Centre
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, and Industrial
Estate
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.
According to
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 the urban plan, shown below, the place is located near the Housing
Estate
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 and
City
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Centre
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, making it quite convenient for those who live in the
City
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Centre
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.
In addition
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, it should be noted that
the
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location 1 is easily accessible by public transport, making the potential location even more attractive. As for the second possible place, it is not so far from the
City
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Centre
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 and Industrial State. It is located
nearby
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 the railway, but its' location is not so convenient for those who live in Housing
Estate
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. The place is closer to those who live outskirts of the
city
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, in
suburbs
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the suburbs
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, city, estate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping mall
  • city center
  • suburbs
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • environmental considerations
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • development
  • consumer behavior
  • green spaces
  • residential area
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