Some people think that all school students should learn a foreign language. Others think that a students should not be required to learn a foreign language if he or she does not have talent for it Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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it is sometimes thought that every school
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believe that
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students
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do not need to learn a foreign
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if they do not have skills. In my
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consider that every student
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to perform in
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competitive world. On the one hand, Some
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think that in all schools
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ought to learn
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language
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for their future betterment and
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agree
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, many higher
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hurdles
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speaking a foreign
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, they could not obtain the higher success in their career.
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, nowadays,
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valuable
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language
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people
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performance
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of
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skill
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, many companies
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foreign clients for
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business expansion
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world-wide
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and to
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convince
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them they require a
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employer
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strong command
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and fluency, so they can communicate sufficiently with
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and grab the deals.
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, it is often believed that learning a foreign
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necessary if
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facing
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difficulties because of less talent. So
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some
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are not
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performing
well in their own traditional
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languages
and other subjects,
people
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think it is enough to complete their education rather than
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struggling
in
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language
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. In some nations,
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, japan, china and
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, in these
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, they
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the primary
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to their national
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instead
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of focusing on other foreign
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language
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because
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language
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children
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future as per their requirements. Another
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is some countries respect their own traditional
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to the next generations. In conclusion,
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people
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multiple foreign
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skills will always be
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beneficial for
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Ensure your introduction and conclusion succinctly present your main argument and summaries your stance effectively.
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You have engaged with the topic and provided a clear personal opinion, which is good for addressing the task.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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