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Some people believe that there will be a reduction in air travel in the future. Do you think that this trend is positive or negative?

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Whether the number of travels by
aircrafts
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 will be dwindled years later or not is an essential issue of public debate.
Although
 any type of technological development might bring about some drawbacks, I will argue that there are several welcoming grounds with regard to
this
 trend. There is a widely held view among people that taking
trip
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 by
airplan
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aeroplane
 is by far
one
 of the most favourable kinds of
traveling
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travelling
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 nowadays that can not be replaced by other transportation means. There are a myriad of factors involved in
this
 claim. The chief
one
 might be the rapid pace of air trips on account of the fact that its airline map is completely incomparable with the
one
locating
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 on the ground.
Moreover
, there
are
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 no traffic congestion during the
prosses
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process
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 of relocating. Most
of
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individuals
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the individuals
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 are of the opinion that
fast
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the fast
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 speed of those
vehicels
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vehicles
 would make them the
one
 and only efficient means of
trasport
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transport
 that will not be replaced in the future. Travelling
on
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 the air,
on the other hand
, has
been
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occurred based on
the
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one
 of the most crucial human
being's
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beings
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 inventions.
This
 means that there is a possibility that
one
 day it will be reformed and replaced by
the
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state-of-the-art means owing to
the
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humankind
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humankind's
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 natural abilities including innovation and creativity. To illustrate, the
airplains
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aeroplanes
 were assumed to have triggered human safety with
numorous
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numerous
 disadvantages at the time when it was just invented,
however
,
the
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their
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 use of
that is
 more frequent these days.
Thus
, the only feasible factor which leads to people's disagreement is the lack of information and
dysfunctinal
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dysfunctional
prediction
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 about the future of travel
meas
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means
. In conclusion, despite some detrimental points of
views
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view
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, I take the view that the decrease in
the
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air travel
have
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 been rooted in some of
potential
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the potential
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 merits of
this
 type of journey.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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