The graph below shows the Avarage daily sales by number of servings

The bar chart illustrates the average

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daily

sales

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in five

differents

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different

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types

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has

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been

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sales

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winter

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adn

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and

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, from starting in

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largest

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amount is hot

coffee

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then

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ice

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coffee

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wherether

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in the summer season from the information that we can see some fluctuated, the highest

ice

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coffee

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and two types of daily

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standable

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and salad.

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season most people need something that

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them feel warm and

relaxing

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, Hot

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is the one

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be good

choices

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was

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cups

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daily,

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soup

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bowls

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salad and

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ice-cream

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were 24 to 25 in daily

sales

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reports.

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ice

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coffee

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was the only 5

cups

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in a day approximately. Summer

which

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long

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period

time

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and people

are enjoying

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their own

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sunbathing, of

cours

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course

ice

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coffee

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is 40

cups

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a day and

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cream

selling

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bolws

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bowls

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, people still

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their hot

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in the morning as I guess it

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st 30

cups

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in daily

sales

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reports and

soup

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and salad still on stable at 25

bolws

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bowls

blows

such

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winter

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
6
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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195 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

average daily sales
number of servings
categories
patterns
trends
external factors
promotions
holidays
sales volume
weekdays
weekends
spikes
drops
inventory
staffing levels
implications
analyze
compare
identify
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