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Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices will help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Government
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 investment in both the public
transport
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 systems
as well as
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 minimizing the
cost
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 of public
transport
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 tickets will contribute a lot to minimizing
transport
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pollution
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.
This
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 essay agrees with
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 statement.
Firstly
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 it will discuss how
transport
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pollution
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 is minimized by these changes. Followed by that it will discuss how
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cost
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the cost
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 of living crisis can be diminished with the help of
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system
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. The majority of
people
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 think that
,
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government
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 investment in public
transport
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as well as
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 reducing public
transport
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 ticket prices will contribute a lot to minimizing
transport
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pollution
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. It is true that the introduction of these systems will minimize the amount of
people
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 using their own
vehicles
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.
Due to
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this
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, we can at least reduce 50% of the
pollution
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. The best example
for
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this
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 scenario
will
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is
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 be
government
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 of the United Kingdom. The
government
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 of
this
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 country has introduced a wide range of
transport
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 systems
such
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 as metro trains, tubs, trams and so on.
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Also
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 the
cost
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 of them
are
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 not expensive.
As a result
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 of
this
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, the majority of
people
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 have a chance to explore all those services and adapt to the one which is the best fit for them.
Due to
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this
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, the country
have
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 minimized
the
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pollution
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 by up to 60
percent
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. Not only
pollution
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 but
also
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 the
cost
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 of living crisis can be minimized with the help of
this
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system
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.
The
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 recent study on inflation has mentioned that
,
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 the price of the product is maximized only when the demand
of
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those item
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 is increased.
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, when
people
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 keep using their
vehicles
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, the value of fossil fuels used to drive those
vehicles
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 will
be
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automatically increase. In conclusion,
government
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 investment in public
transport
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 and minimizing the rate of tickets will contribute a lot
in
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to
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 controlling or minimizing
transport
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pollution
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. By introducing
this
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system
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 we are allowing
people
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 to reduce the usage of their
vehicles
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.
Along with
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that
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that,
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this
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system
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 will
also
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 contribute to minimizing inflation in a country.

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intro conclusion
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detail example
Consider expanding on each point with greater detail and more specific examples. This will help demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
grammatical
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sentence structure
Try to vary your sentence structures and vocabulary to make the essay more engaging. Repetitive structures can make the writing appear monotonous.
task response
The essay clearly addresses the task, discussing how government investment in public transport and reduced ticket prices can help reduce pollution.
logical structure
There is a logical flow of ideas, with a clear introduction followed by body paragraphs and a conclusion.
relevant example
Relevant examples, such as the situation in the United Kingdom, are provided to support the main points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable transport
  • carbon footprint
  • mass transit
  • subsidization
  • fare reduction
  • environmental impact
  • urban planning
  • public policy
  • commuter behavior
  • infrastructural development
  • economic efficiency
  • equitable access
  • lifestyle shift
  • congestion
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