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In the past, buildings often reflected the culture of a society but today all modern building look alike and cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar. Why is this a case? Is it a good or bad thing

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Many decades ago, constructions were considered as social items,
however
, in
this
 modern era, up-to-date buildings absolutely match together
as well as
 worldwide metropolitans are almost identical in construction.
This
 essay believes that
this
 phenomenon arises from the standardization
along with
 the high cost of land, making it a negative change
due to
 the loss of national
cutures
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cultures
culture
. Buildings with the same structure in urban areas
is
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 a concerning proliferation because of the standard issue.
In other words
, with increased interconnectedness,
architectual
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architectural
 trends and construction materials have become more and more standardized, leading to similar building styles across different regions.
Additionally
, architects tend to follow available patterns which are favourable towards
costumers
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customers
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.
For instance
, attached houses in the UK are erected in the ancient style
as
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that
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their
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its
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prevalence
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 in that nation.
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task achievement
Ensure the clarity of your main points and provide detailed examples to support your arguments. For example, elaborate further on the loss of national cultures due to standardized buildings.
coherence
Include a conclusion to summarize your main points and provide a final perspective on the question. This will make your argument more complete and coherent.
coherence
Improve the logical structure by clearly linking your ideas. Use transition words and phrases to guide the reader through your essay smoothly.
task achievement
You've provided a good explanation for why modern buildings look similar across different cities, mentioning both standardization and cost considerations.
task achievement
The essay stays on topic and addresses the question directly, showing a good understanding of the task.
coherence
The structure of the essay is generally clear, with an introduction and body paragraphs that address different aspects of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • standardization
  • homogenization
  • interconnectedness
  • architectural trends
  • construction materials
  • technological advancements
  • functionality
  • cultural designs
  • economic factors
  • investors
  • developers
  • profitable
  • replication
  • traditional skills
  • craftsmen
  • generations
  • culturally distinctive
  • media
  • promote
  • global culture
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