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The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.

The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.
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The supplied pie chart indicates the amount of
money
 which was spent in the budget on various parts by the United Arab Emirates government in 2000. A glance at the graph reveals that
,
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UAE
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the UAE
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 spent more
money
in
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 social security and health and personal services than other services like law and order transport and industry etc. Nearly half of the budget was spent on health,personal services and
also
 social security,respectively 53
billion
 and 100
billion
 in UAE in 2000.(Which was the highest
money
 in that year).
moreover
,just over a third of
money
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the money
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 was invested
for
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 education roughly 38
billion
 in UAE IN 2000. The United Arab Emirates did not prefer to invest the budget in some sections like transport,law and order,housing,heritage and environment and they comprised a tiny fraction.
similary
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, following parts like Defence,education and other
expenditure
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 included small
proporation
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corporations
 like 17billion for law and order and 13
billion
 for industry,agriculture and employment.
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