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In the past, people ate local food in season, but nowadays, people can buy a variety of food from all over the world. Do the advantages of this development outweigh it disadvantages?

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Introduction
in the old days, society used to eat seasonal
food
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usualy
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usually
 from the
local
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locals
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, nowadays society can get to eat
a lots
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a lot
lots
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 of kinds of
food
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 not only from
local
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locals
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, but
also
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 from far places, and yes the
benifts
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benefits
benefit
is
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are
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 more than someone can
imagen
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imagine
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.
Body paragraph 1
In the
beganing
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beginning
, when we can get
food
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 from even far
placec
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places
place
 that
mean
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means
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 we can enjoy
food
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 that can't be getting
unlesss
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unless
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 we travel far to get the
expermint
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experience
. but now we
lucky
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are lucky
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 that someone can get any
types
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type
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 of
food
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 in his city,
as
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for
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 example people
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who lives
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lives
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live
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 in the middle of
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a disert
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disert
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desert
 in Riyadh now can enjoy eating yummy fresh fish, sushi, steak as well, and so and so.
Conclusion
To sum up
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, the
belifrage
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belief
 of getting lots of
food
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 kinds nowadays
poeople
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people
 can get is
somthing
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something
adds
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that adds
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 up as a
positve
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positive
things
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thing
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 and for sure we
needs
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need
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 to be
gratfull
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grateful
 for
such
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a
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apply
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things.

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grammar
Work on grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity. For example, pay attention to subject-verb agreement and proper use of articles.
task achievement
Develop more comprehensive points and support them with detailed explanations or examples. For instance, you could elaborate on both the advantages and disadvantages of having access to international foods.
general
Ensure your introduction more clearly outlines the structure of your essay and that your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed.
task achievement
You have clearly stated that the benefits of the development outweigh the disadvantages.
task achievement
The essay includes real-life examples, such as people in Riyadh enjoying various types of food, which shows some engagement with the topic.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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