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The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.

The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.
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The provided table compares data about the top five nations for international travel in 2012 and 2013.
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, despite France having the most visitors in both years, tourists spent more money in the USA than other countries. It is clear from the data that in 2012, the quantity of visitors from France was the most 83
million
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 and it increased by just under 85
million
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 they spent 53.6
billion
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dollars
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 in 2012 and about 56
billion
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dollars
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 in 2013.
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 the number of tourists in the USA was less than France in both years, they spent approximately 126
billion
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dollars
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 in 2012 and 140
billion
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dollars
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 in 2013. The total of travellers in Spain was 57.5
million
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 in 2012 and it grew significantly and reached 60.7
million
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 in 2013 and they spent roughly 56
billion
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dollars
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 and 60
billion
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dollars
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, respectively. It is interesting to note that
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 the number of visitors in China had a downward trend and it was 57.7
million
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 in 2012 and 55.7
million
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 in 2013, the spent money had an upward tendency and it was exactly 50
billion
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dollars
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 and 51.7
billion
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dollars
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, respectively. The number of tourists in Italy had a minor change and the spent money rose considerably from 41.2
billion
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dollars
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 in 2012 to 43.9
billion
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dollars
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 in 2013.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourist arrivals
  • influx of tourists
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • revenue generation
  • geographical distribution
  • popular destination
  • regional analysis
  • natural attractions
  • cultural heritage
  • seasonal trends
  • tourism patterns
  • climatic conditions
  • tourism preferences
  • adventure tourism
  • eco-tourism
  • cultural tourism
  • holiday seasons
  • local events
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