The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.
The pie chart and table represents the number of tourists from four different region: Asia, Europe, the states, and
others
, at a particular holiday resort in Australia, indicated as percentages and information of tourist in three aspects: length of stay, accomodation, and activity.
Overall
, it can be clearly observe that European travellers account for the largest ratio,
whereas
that of the
others
area take the fewest proportion.
However
, it is interesting to note that these peoples from various area have different tastes of travel.
To begin
with, at 37% , traveller from Europe was the greatest proportion among the
others
countries, followed by Asia, America, and
others
at 35%, 18%, and 10%, respectively. In regards with, the table shows keys information of the tourist. In terms of the average length of stay, European tourists by far the longest at 16 days,
whereas
Asian only spend time on a trip for a week.
Moreover
, it seems like Asian and American have similar style of travel as they love to relax themselve in a luxurious accomodation like 5 or 4 star hotel, unlike the europeans and
others
who prefer to stay in a camping or caravan
instead
.
Likewise
, it is obvious that both asian and american enjoy sightseeing, whilst the other two group enjoy water activity
such
as swimming, sunbathing, and surfing.
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  • Tourist influx
  • Peak season
  • Demographic information
  • Fluctuations
  • Duration of stay
  • Preferred accommodations
  • Analyze
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Compare and contrast
  • Speculate
  • Marketing campaigns
  • Management
  • Data
  • Notable
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