The process diagram illustrates the steps by which liquid chocolcate is produced from cocoa beans.

The process diagram illustrates the steps by which liquid chocolcate is produced from cocoa beans.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The process diagram illustrates the steps by which liquid chocolcate is produced from cocoa beans.
The flow chart shows the process that how
cocoa
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beans
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are turned into
chocolate
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.
Overall
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, there are 10 stages in the whole
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chocolate producing
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chocolate-producing
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process,
begining
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beginning
with the harvesting
ripe
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of ripe
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red pods and ending with the
completing
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completion
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liquid
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of liquid
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chocolate
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.
To begin
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, the white
cocoa
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beans
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used to harvest in order to
beans
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fermentation from
cocoa
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tree
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which are grown in South America, Africa and Indonesia . After
,
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apply
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they are fermented , these
beans
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are placed in order to
sun dry
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sundry
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. They are stayed for a
while
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in
sun
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the sun
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.
Afterwords
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Afterwards
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, they are packed or put in
lurge
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large
sacks and delivered by train or lorry. After
,
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Beans
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are transported, they are roasted which
brought
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to the factory. The temperature of
cocoa
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beans
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roasting
were
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was
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350 degrees . In the subsequent step, the
Beans
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go through a crushing and removing process in order to clean
of
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up
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excess things.
Finally
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, the
Beans
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are pressed until they become
chocolate
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. In conclusion,
cocoa
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beans
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expressed
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express
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different processes
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while
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when
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they are turned into
chocolate
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cocoa, beans, chocolate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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