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Nowadays more and more people want to get things done instantly. Why is it? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#people #development
These days, a wide range of
people
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quick
services
, immediate information and prompt task completion. In my perspective, I contend that
this
 issue is motivated by the advent of technology and the demand for higher expectations which have a detrimental impact on
people
's personality traits. The demand for instant results become increasingly prevalent
due to
 the rapid advancements in technology. It can be acknowledged that the way we interact is revolutionized by the renovation of modern gadgets
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, high-speed internet and the
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services
. With just
few
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 basic taps or steps, individuals can order food from
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 distance, request transportation even in peak hours and access news instantaneously.
Therefore
,
people
 gain more opportunities to save their valuable time and effort by the efficiency and convenience of technology.
Moreover
, the swift responses and seamless experience can have reshaped consumer expectations with higher and more quality
services
. In my point of view, I believe the immediate
services
 can bring about an adverse development in
people
's personality. Individuals hardly invest their time and effort for long-term rewards because of a lack of perseverance and patience. Noticeably, the practice of delayed gratification is a crucial element for
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personal growth, skills improvement and achieving ambitious goals. If prioritizing instant outcomes,
people
 may be discouraged from
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 setbacks and challenges on their way which can easily
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 their process. In conclusion, the instant gratification is fueled by the technological advancements and high expectations.
However
,
people
 must be cautious of the pronounced negative consequences on personal development.
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You have clearly stated your opinion on the issue and supported it with relevant reasons.
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Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, helping the reader understand your point from the beginning to the end.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant gratification
  • rapid advancement
  • instant communication
  • online shopping
  • fast food delivery
  • social media platforms
  • immediate feedback
  • recognition and validation
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • convenience
  • decreased patience
  • delayed gratification
  • realistic expectations
  • work ethic
  • unrealistic expectations
  • stress
  • dissatisfaction
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