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You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently, a new neighbour Mr.Jackson moved in who has loud parties several times a week. You have spoken to Mr.Jackson but are not very close friends Write a letter to Mr.Jackson. In your letter: •Explain the situation •Describe why it bothers you •Suggest a solution

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Dear Mr. Jackson, The reason I am writing to you is to solve some problems with your frequent parties.
To begin
 with, I want to explain to you that the noise you
makewhile
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make while
 having a party is so unbearable for me. I can fully understand you, as I was your age and had the same problems, but you
also
 have to understand that there are a lot of laws that forbid making noise after 10 p.m.
Moreover
, you can have
neighbors
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 who have children, who especially need to live in a peaceful atmosphere.
Consequently
, the main problem is that your parties often happen at night, so I just cannot sleep well. I have trouble sleeping, and with constant loud sounds, I cannot fix my sleeping mode.
In addition
, I work almost all day, and when I want to have free time and be with my thoughts and feelings, the noise that comes from the higher floor just does not allow me to have a rest.
To sum up
, I want you to understand that you are not living here alone. Try to have parties outside your apartment. Apart from that, there are a bunch of places in our town where you can go with your friends.
For instance
, game clubs or some sports activities. I hope for your understanding, and I thank you in advance. Sincerely, Kseniia Malokhatko
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task achievement
While the letter explains the situation and describes why it bothers the writer, it would benefit from more specific details or examples to strengthen the points made.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to enhance clarity and readability. For instance, separating the rules on noise from the example of neighbors with children may improve logical flow.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate, maintaining a respectful tone throughout the letter.
task achievement
The letter clearly addresses the three required points: explaining the situation, describing why it bothers you, and suggesting a solution.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable and considerate, making reasonable requests while also showing understanding of the neighbor's perspective.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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