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Last week, you lost your luggage while traveling on holiday. Luckily, you have travel insurance. Write letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter: - Describe the characteristics of what you lost - Explain how you lost it - Tell the insurance company what you need from them

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Dear Mr. Smith, The reason I am writing to you is to inform you of my recent lost baggage during my holidays. First of all, I would like to provide you with detailed information about my loss. It is a brown
bag
 with a yellow handkerchief around the belt. It is middle-sized and
also
 there is a small keychain in the shape of a car. Inside the
bag
 were my passport, a photo of my little daughter, my sunglasses and some money.
Secondly
, I lost my valuable item during the trip
while
 I was on the train. The train company is called "Fast and
furious
Capitalize word
Furious
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". The incident took place on May, 10th from 3AM to 5AM. I always take my
bag
 with me because once I hardly had it stolen.
Therefore
, nothing seemed wrong to me and I did not worry about anything. But when I arrived at my destination, I understood that I lost my
bag
.
To sum up
, I would like you to contact me as soon as possible and you can send my
bag
 to me by post. Or, we can arrange a meeting on weekends somewhere in the centre of the city. I look forward to your reply. Thank you in advance. Yours Sincerely, Kseniia
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task achievement
Your letter provides a clear and detailed description of the lost luggage and the circumstances under which it was lost. However, explicitly requesting compensation or insurance claim processing from the insurance company could strengthen the task achievement further.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the letter is logical and easy to follow, with a clear opening, body, and closing. Yet, be mindful of minor inaccuracies or unclear expressions. For example, 'I hardly had it stolen' could be better phrased as 'I almost had it stolen.'
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are polite and appropriately framed, adhering to formal letter-writing conventions.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph addresses a single idea, making the letter organized and coherent.
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