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Some people think that environmental problem should be overcome globally. Others think that the should be solved domestically. What is your opinion?

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While
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 some people believe that global environmental
issues
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 have to be tackled locally, others consider an international approach is the best way to deal with them. In my opinion, international cooperation is the most efficient and effective method of fighting environmental
issues
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due to
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 the high cost of possible
measures
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 and the global negative consequences of these
problems
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.
Firstly
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, taking into consideration the extremely high cost of
measures
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 that can be implemented to alleviate environmental
problems
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, namely air and water pollution, a global approach will be more effective. Undoubtedly, there are many poor
countries
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 with an unstable and ineffective economy and they lack sufficient finance to allocate to solving environmental
problems
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. Many African
countries
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,
for instance
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, face different, more severe
problems
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, namely water and food shortages, which is the reason why they are unable to contribute to fighting global environmental
problems
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.
Hence
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 without financial support from rich nations, environmental
issues
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 will be tackled only locally which is not the best approach to the resolution of global
problems
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.
Secondly
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, environmental
problems
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 have a negative and potentially devastating effect on
countries
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 all over the world. If only a few states try to fight global
problems
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,
whereas
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 others do not contribute to it, the
overall
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 effect of implemented
measures
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 will be insignificant. To give a clear example, even if all developed
countries
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 reduce the
amount
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number
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 of greenhouse gases emitted
yearlys
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yearly
years
ubstantially
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substantially
, the total amount of
such
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 gases causing global warming will be decreased insignificantly because of the contribution of a much higher number of undeveloped and poor
countries
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.
Thus
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, global
issues
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 should be alleviated internationally.
To sum up
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, I once again reaffirm my position that environmental
issues
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 should be tackled globally owing to the scale of negative consequences and the high cost of required
measures
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transnational problems
  • climate change
  • ozone layer depletion
  • pollution
  • collaborative efforts
  • pooling of resources
  • expertise
  • technology
  • innovative solutions
  • international standards
  • race to the bottom
  • environmental standards
  • capacity
  • impacts
  • national sovereignty
  • independently
  • economic
  • social contexts
  • international consensus
  • legal
  • political systems
  • enforcement
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