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The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four countries

The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four countries
The bar chart illustrates data about
import
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the import
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 of
tea
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 and
coffee
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in
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from
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 four great
countries
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 (
Canada
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,
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UK
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the UK
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,
USA
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the USA
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 and
Germany
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).
Overall
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, it is clear
the
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that
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UK
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 consumers
was
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had
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 the most rapid amount of
tea
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 compared to other
countries
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,
whereas
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in
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apply
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Germany
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was
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imported the biggest amount of
coffee
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.
Afterwards
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 it
also
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 be highlighted
is
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that
Canada
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 and the US practically had the same proportion of imported goods. Turning to details, the
UK
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 was the first highest buyer of
tea
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 among other
countries
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 and purchased 80000
tonnes
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 of
tea
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, whilst
Germany
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 bought
by
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double-less (about 40000
tonnes
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). As for
Canada
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 and the US, they purchased about 20000
tonnes
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both
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. Meanwhile,
Germany
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 acquired 50000
tonnes
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 of
coffee
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 and became the biggest importer in comparison to other
countries
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. At the same time,
Canada
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 and
US
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the US
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 bought
by
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10000
tonnes
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 less, at about 40000. As for
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UK
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the UK
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, despite the fact that the
UK
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 purchased the largest amount of
tea
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,
whereas
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 the
UK
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 acquired the least significant part of
coffee
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, with just 30000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, countries, canada, uk, germany, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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