You recently learned that a close friend of yours has had a baby, and you purchased a gift for the baby. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: Congratulate them on the arrival of the baby. Describe the gift you have chosen for the baby. Suggest arrangements for your visit to deliver the gift.

Dear Raj, What
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great news to start the day!! Congratulations on the arrival of your 1st
baby
. Guess you would be naming him as Kevin, as you mentioned earlier. Between convey my warm wishes to your wife Leena as well. Hope she is recovering well now. Anticipating your child's arrival, I made some gift plans
last
week. I went to Hougang
mall
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last
Sunday and found an imported
baby
cradle from Japan in one of the
baby
shops. I really liked the cushion on the bed and it
also
has many other outstanding features as well. It can sense your
baby
's movements, adjust fan speed and play lullabies to make him peacefully sleep. I am pretty sure
such
models are not found in our local stores and
hence
, I immediately bought that for your champ. I am aware that you would be pretty busy in the next few days to arrange your house's bedroom.
Hence
, I will come later today to your home and will deliver my gift directly to your parents. Kindly ask them to be in your house by 6pm. Congrats again!! I will come and see your little champ later
this
week with my family. Yours friendly Ram
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The letter is quite comprehensive and covers all the required elements. However, improving the flow between paragraphs will make it even better.
coherence cohesion
The bonding between the different parts of the letter can be made smoother by using transitions.
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You have appropriately congratulated your friend and conveyed warm wishes to his wife, showing a polite and pleasant tone.
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The gift description is detailed, which adds a personal touch to the letter.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate, adding to the overall coherence of the letter.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Heartfelt congratulations
  • Newborn baby
  • Exciting and joyous time
  • Thoughtful gift
  • Special features
  • Hope you will enjoy
  • Delightful surprise
  • Eager to meet
  • Flexible schedule
  • Adjust to a new routine
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