The chart compares how well students from a range of disciplines did in their year 1 assessments in 2008 and 2012

The chart compares how well students from a range of disciplines did in their year 1 assessments in 2008 and 2012
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The chart compares how well students from a range of disciplines did in the year 1 assessments in 2008 and 2012.
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, the difference in proportions between the years can be easily noticed. Almost all of the subject areas have experienced significant growth, some even doubling the amount they had before,
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as business and the humanities. But there are still some aspects that haven’t changed: Computer science has remained the discipline with the highest passing rate; the humanities have
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stayed the lowest,
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health science has been consistent. Compared to 2008, the
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accomplishments have recorded huge improvements in 2012. The most impressive one by far is Business, which started with about 20% and has managed to get to a little over 50%. Computer science has
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achieved a great percentage of a little more than 80% in comparison with the humanities, which was still the lowest in 2012 but has risen from almost nothing to about 10%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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