The chart below gives information about Southland's main export in 2000, 20.., and future projections for 2035.

The chart below gives information about Southland's main export in 2000, 20.., and future projections for 2035.
The Bar chart illustrates the production of three categories of
products
in three different years,
accordingly
2000, 2024 and 2035 with
billion
pounds
. From the
table
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it is clear that
the sales of international tourism experienced
increasing
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an increasing
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trend in each stated
years
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,
in
contrast
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Meat
products
are following
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the
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descending trend till the end of
projected
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years.
According to
the chart International Tourism trading is gradually increasing from 8
billion
pounds
in 2000 to almost 9
billion
pound
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in 2024 and is reaching
to
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10
billion
pounds
in forecasted 2035. When it comes to Dairy
products
there was a dramatic peak from 7
billion
pounds
to almost 10
billion
pounds
between 2000 and 2024. And in 2035 the value of production is
gradullay
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gradually
decaresing
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decreasing
to 9.5
billion
pounds
. On the exports of Meat
products
, the figures were the lowest
one
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in comparison with 2 other ranges at 6
billion
pounds
. In 2024 the trading of
this
range experienced
gradual
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a gradual
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decrease from 6
billion
to 5.5
billion
pounds
and it will follow the descending trend
while
reaching the lowest position in 2035 with the number of 5
billion
pound
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pounds
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. (Samir Nabiyev)
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, billion, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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