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The bar chart provides information about how often people in the USA spent ate fast food from 2003 to 2013.

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The bar charts illustrate the
amount
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 of fast
food
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 consumption by US citizens in different timelines in a decade, from 2003 to 2013.
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, it can be seen that over
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 period most of the individuals who lived in the USA, went to restaurants to have fast
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 at least once a week
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 the number of people who ate these junk foods every day or never was at the lowest. On the one hand, in 2006 the consumption of fast
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 was more popular among US citizens more than 33% of them preferred having
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 once a week which was about 2% higher than in 2003 and 6% in the next 6 years.
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, having junk
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 in restaurants several times
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a week was more popular with one in five per cent which was 5% and 3% higher in comparison to 2013 and 2003 respectively.
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, in 2003, less than 5% loved to spend their time in restaurants and
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 trend decreased by 2% and levelled off in 2006 and 2013.
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, In comparison to other years, people spent their time once or twice a month in 2013 the same
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 that they had every day in 2006
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 3% and one in ten per cent in 2003 and 2006 respectively. After 2003, with only 13% eating fast
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 a few times a year,
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amount
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 experienced a 2% increase with 15% in 2006 and 2013.
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, after 2003 only 5% of people had never had fast
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, in the next two periods,
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amount
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 saw a 2% decline.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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