The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the number of travellers to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after renovation. The chart depicts the results of questions asking voyagers how much they enjoyed they were with their travel.
Overall
, it's obvious that the number of individuals that travelled to Ashdown Museum increased rapidly. Result of the surveys, Linking Words
residents
pleasure Change noun form
residents'
resident's
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while
their visit improved.
Change preposition
during
Firstly
, the year before restoration the majority of Linking Words
people
were not pleased with their travel. Most of them were dissatisfied and very dissatisfied. Use synonyms
Additionally
, 10% of them were satisfied and 15% of them were very enjoyed.
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Secondly
, the year after refurbishment the number of Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
raised
quickly, Verb problem
rose
also
, how much more Linking Words
people
were happy with their carry is obvious. Use synonyms
In addition
, the Linking Words
residents
who were pleased increased to 40% and Correct quantifier usage
number of residents
people
who were very satisfied extended to 35%. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, the fall in the proportion of citizens who were dissatisfied or very dissatisfied can be seen easilyLinking Words
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