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The process gives information about how carbonated water is made.

#process #information #water
The flow chart illustrates the process
which
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 carbonated drinks are made in either a bottle or a can.
Overall
, there are five steps which begin from filtering
water
 to packaging and delivering to stores. The first stage starts with filtering in the softener and adding chemicals.
Then
, pass
to
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it to
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 the pump to mix it. The second step is cooling to
water
 in the pipe after, the carbon dioxide will be added. The carbonated
water
 will be passed to the mixing tank. Before filtering the
water
 colouring, syrup, and flavour will be added to the mixing tank. The next important stage is filling
water
 bottles and cans. Kindly stage is packaging the product and deliver to supermarkets.
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task response
Ensure your introduction fully captures the topic of the process chart. For example, you could rephrase it as: 'The flow chart illustrates the process of making carbonated drinks in either a bottle or a can.' This makes it clearer to the reader.
task response
The overall progression is good but ensure you fully describe each step. For instance, in the second step, describe what happens in more detail: 'The filtered water is passed through a cooling pipe where it's cooled and then carbon dioxide is added in a carbonation chamber.'
coherence cohesion
Break your essay into clear, distinct paragraphs, especially noting transitions between steps in the process. This helps the reader follow the process more easily.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each sentence flows logically to the next. Linking words and phrases can help guide the reader through the process, for example: 'Once the water has been filtered, it moves to the...' or 'Following this, the water is...'
coherence cohesion
Good overall structure with a clear beginning, middle, and end. This is critical in allowing the reader to follow the described process.
task response
The main stages of the process have been identified and described, demonstrating understanding of the process.

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