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countris should produce enough food for their own population and import as little as possible. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#countris #food #population #import
Most
countries
 send their products
such
 as
food
 to another
country
, but some argue that the government should transfer them as little as possible.
Although
 producing enough
food
 has its own advantages,
however
, in my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement because I suppose it helps the government, and I will examine and explain it. First of all, some
country
 makes money from selling
food
 to other
countries
 and
this
 may lead to
the
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an
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 improved economy.
For example
, Iran is one of the most powerful
countries
 in having full of rice and saffron. It transfers to another
country
 and sells it more expensive and it is one way of getting income.
Thus
, if the government is able to produce more
food
 and transfer it to another
country
, it will probably benefit from that.
Secondly
, we can save our natural resources for the future and reduce air pollution.
For instance
, every watermelon needs 10L water to grow and produce 5 Carbon dioxide, so some
countries
 like Dubai do not plant it and transfer it from other
countries
 because they encounter with lack of water and avoid polluting the air.
Therefore
, every
country
 must be conservation about every
food
's equipment to avoid damage to their resources. In conclusion, transferring foods is not only necessary, but, it may cause economic benefits and maintain natural resources for the future.
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introduction conclusion present
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