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The three pie charts illustrate the changes in annual spending by local government in Someland in three different year

The three pie charts illustrate the changes in annual spending by local government in Someland in three different year
The two pie charts illustrate the aftermath of a survey
among
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 the guests who visit the museum. Meanwhile, it is a comparison between the former and the later years about
people
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's feedback on
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 of
museum
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the museum
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.
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, before transformation,
people
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 who were dissatisfied had a lion's share.
Although
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 no response from visitors is constant in before or after.
However
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, more
people
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 are very satisfied with the changes. Looking at the pie charts, it is crystal clear that previously the majority of
people
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 were dissatisfied 40% and later the ratio declined to 15%.
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, very satisfied surged to double 35% as in the past it stood at 15% and no response from tourists has recorded the same percentile of 5% in both years. Moving towards the rest of the information, satisfaction was 30% before transforming the museum as it climbed dramatically to 10%.
People
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 who were very dissatisfied were 10% and after some development,

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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