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Some people say that every human being can create art (e.g. painting), others think only the people born with the ability can create art. Discuss both views and give your opinion

It is undeniable that we are living in
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 the majority of
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 appreciate the meaningful values of artworks more than ever before.
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, there are some
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 opinions in terms of the ability to create
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.
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 a large number of
people
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 share the same thought that
art
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 can be created by everyone without owning natural talent,
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others hold the opposite
perspectives
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 that
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 a few
people
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 who are gifted with artistic genius are able to produce
art
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. Personally, I strongly approve
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 the first point of view for
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several
 different reasons that will be
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discussed
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below.
Firstly
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, it is obvious that
art
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 has no limit and can be demonstrated
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through
diversity
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the diversity
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 of methods (paintings, drawings, music, clothes, …) by different
people
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, from
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 to ordinary
people
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. Everyone has the same
opportunies
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opportunities
 to express their feelings and thoughts via creating
art
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, which makes
art
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 become a place
that
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where
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 every single person can make their voice heard and build emotional harmony among
people
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. In summary, everyone can create
art
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 as long as they are
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 and willing to find new inspirations.
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,
art
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 cannot truly flourish without personal experience, which natural talent does not provide on its own. In fact, the
inprirations
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inspirations
 from each
individual’
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 unique experiences are
such
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the
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 extremely vital element of
art
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 that
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 the whole
art
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’s
intricsic
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intricate
 values.
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, an artwork offers
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, exploring, and refining
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a set
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 of
skils
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 to transform raw ideas into finished works of
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. Taking everything into account,
although
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 there are always exceptions regarding
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an endless controversial topic, I still
wholdheartly
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wholeheartedly
 support the first opinion because I believe that
art
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 is created by
continous
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continuous
 effort and special experience reflecting the artist’s slice of life, which gifted talent cannot be taken for granted.

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grammar and structure
Make a clear plan before you write: intro, two body parts, and a short conclusion. Use simple, short sentences and check spellings.
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Stick to one main view. Give two or three clear reasons for your view and add one simple example for each reason.
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You show a clear view and try to explain why.
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The topic of art for all is stated in many parts of the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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