Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

Transportation is
one
of the most considerable factors when
people
travel
, and some believe that the best choice to reach a
city
is driving
cars
while
others claim riding
bicycle
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a bicycle
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should be the
way
. In my point of view,
bicycle
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the bicycle
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is basically
better
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a better
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option than
cars
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car
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even though it totally depends on
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the situations
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situations
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situation
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. On the
one
hand, the price of
bicycle
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a bicycle
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allows numerous individuals to purchase it,
thus
it is effortless for them to have
one
. As an example, when
people
have a trip
in
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to
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a
city
with a huge group, more than
one
car is required to
travel
them
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with them
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at once, which means that the
travel
fee becomes expensive.
In contrast
, riding
bicycle
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a bicycle
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definitely reduces the cost,
additionally
, they can ride it even
with
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in
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a large community since everyone owns it.
Therefore
,
bicycle
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the bicycle
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is an effective
way
to
travel
in an urban area because of its
affodability
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affordability
and price, and I support
this
opinion.
On the other hand
,
cars
are
effective
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an effective
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way
to trip
in
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apply
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a
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downtown
have
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and have
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its
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their
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own profits especially when the weather is extremely cold or hot.
For instance
, London, which is
one
of the most well-known
city
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cities
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in the world, is typically so cold compared to other famous
cites
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cities
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. In
this
circumstance,
people
would not want to drive a car
instead
of
ride
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riding
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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since they can manipulate the temperature inside of their
cars
.
Thus
, under the extreme
wheather
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weather
, driving a car is the best
way
of
traveling
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travelling
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a
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to a
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city
. In conclusion,
while
driving
auto mobiles
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automobiles
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is
a
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an
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excellent
way
in
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on
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some specific occasions, the merit of
bicycle
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a bicycle
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mainly outweighs that of
cars
.
Hence
, I personally argue that riding
bicycle
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a bicycle
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is the best choice when
people
have a trip in a
city
.
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task achievement
Expand on the idea of affordability and how bicycles can be more eco-friendly and promote health benefits.
task achievement
Develop the argument related to weather conditions further and include more examples.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that transitions between paragraphs are smoother and link ideas logically from one paragraph to the next.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly states both viewpoints and the writer's opinion.
supported main points
The essay covers both perspectives and provides examples to support each point.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively restates the writer's opinion and reinforces the main points discussed in the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenient
  • inclement weather
  • heavy loads
  • environmentally friendly
  • promote physical health
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • cost-effective
  • fuel costs
  • parking fees
  • comfort
  • safety
  • poorly developed infrastructure
  • traffic jams
  • parking options
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