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Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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Transportation is
one
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 of the most considerable factors when
people
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travel
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, and some believe that the best choice to reach a
city
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 is driving
cars
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while
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 others claim riding
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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 should be the
way
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. In my point of view,
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bicycle
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the bicycle
a bicycle
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 is basically
better
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a better
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 option than
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cars
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car
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 even though it totally depends on
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the situations
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situations
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situation
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. On the
one
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 hand, the price of
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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 allows numerous individuals to purchase it,
thus
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 it is effortless for them to have
one
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. As an example, when
people
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 have a trip
in
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to
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 a
city
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 with a huge group, more than
one
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 car is required to
travel
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them
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with them
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 at once, which means that the
travel
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 fee becomes expensive.
In contrast
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, riding
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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 definitely reduces the cost,
additionally
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, they can ride it even
with
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in
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 a large community since everyone owns it.
Therefore
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,
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bicycle
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the bicycle
a bicycle
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 is an effective
way
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 to
travel
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 in an urban area because of its
affodability
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affordability
 and price, and I support
this
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 opinion.
On the other hand
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,
cars
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 are
effective
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an effective
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way
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 to trip
in
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apply
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a
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apply
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downtown
have
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and have
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its
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their
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 own profits especially when the weather is extremely cold or hot.
For instance
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, London, which is
one
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 of the most well-known
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city
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cities
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 in the world, is typically so cold compared to other famous
cites
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cities
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. In
this
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 circumstance,
people
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 would not want to drive a car
instead
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 of
ride
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riding
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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 since they can manipulate the temperature inside of their
cars
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.
Thus
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, under the extreme
wheather
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weather
, driving a car is the best
way
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 of
traveling
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travelling
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a
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to a
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city
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. In conclusion,
while
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 driving
auto mobiles
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automobiles
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 is
a
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an
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 excellent
way
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in
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on
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 some specific occasions, the merit of
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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 mainly outweighs that of
cars
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.
Hence
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, I personally argue that riding
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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 is the best choice when
people
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 have a trip in a
city
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.

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task achievement
Expand on the idea of affordability and how bicycles can be more eco-friendly and promote health benefits.
task achievement
Develop the argument related to weather conditions further and include more examples.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that transitions between paragraphs are smoother and link ideas logically from one paragraph to the next.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly states both viewpoints and the writer's opinion.
supported main points
The essay covers both perspectives and provides examples to support each point.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively restates the writer's opinion and reinforces the main points discussed in the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenient
  • inclement weather
  • heavy loads
  • environmentally friendly
  • promote physical health
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • cost-effective
  • fuel costs
  • parking fees
  • comfort
  • safety
  • poorly developed infrastructure
  • traffic jams
  • parking options
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