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You are going on holiday next week and you need to ask your friend to watch your dog while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • state how long you will be away • tell them what needs to be done • state how you will compensate them

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Dear Sara, How have you been? My holiday will start between 20 and 27 July and I’m going to Tehran for a holiday. Despite my best efforts, I couldn’t arrange for my
dog
 to accompany me.
Due to
 the fact that I thought I asked you a huge
favor
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 to look after my
dog
while
 I am in Tehran. My
dog
 is a female
dog
 and its name is Kaya. Kaya is a quiet
dog
 and has long black hair. You should usually brush her hair and trim it. She is fond of pop music tracks and watching musical movies. She isn’t batter for eating. She is keen on fish and poultry,
however
 she hates eating beef and clams. Sorry about the hustle. I bet having arrived in Tehran, I’ll sort out your letters, E-mails and books,
moreover
, I will repair your car and printer.
In addition
, I’ll think of other
way
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 to repay your kindness in future. Thanks a million in advance. Best wishes, Ma
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coherence cohesion
Your letter provides a good overall structure, but ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity.
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Consider elaborating slightly more on your dog's routine, such as mentioning specific feeding times or any special care requirements.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are friendly and appropriate for a letter to a friend.
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You have clearly mentioned the length of your absence, your dog's needs, and how you plan to compensate your friend, which makes your response complete.
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The tone of your letter is warm and personal, suitable for writing to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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