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Your English teacher has found a new penfriend for you. Write a letter to the penfriend and introduce yourself. Tell them what you like doing in your free time. Ask your penfriend to tell you about their hobbies and interests.

#english #teacher #penfriend #time #hobbies #interests
Dear Adam, My teacher suggested that I write to you because I am looking for a penfriend. I
also
 wanted to know if you are interested in writing to me. I am Navneet Kaur, I am a graduate student from St. Lawrance
college
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College
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 in the business studies course.
However
, I wanted to study
further
,
hence
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so
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, I joined
the
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apply
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Canadore
college
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College
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 for the French course. I really love to play basketball and football.
Moreover
, going for an evening walk
along with
 doing yoga for some time during the day are my
most
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apply
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favourite activities. Meanwhile, I
inherit
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inherited
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 excellent cooking skills which I got from my mother. During the weekends, I spend time cooking delicious meals for my family and friends. I am really interested to know about your likes and dislikes. I am keenly interested to know about your hobbies that
helps
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 you to get relaxed in your free time. I will be waiting for your letter. Yours sincerely, Navneet Kaur.
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task achievement
Try to elaborate a bit more on why you enjoy your hobbies or what specifically interests you in your studies; this will add more depth to your letter.
coherence cohesion
Ensure consistent tense use throughout your writing to maintain clarity.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and suitable for a penfriend, which creates a warm and inviting atmosphere.
coherence cohesion
The letter has clear paragraphs and a logical structure, effectively separating the introduction, your interests, and questions to the penfriend.
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