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The pie cahrts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to The US between 1988 and 2000

The pie cahrts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to The US between 1988 and 2000
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The table
illustrate
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 the amount of money spent on
fish
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 in dollars,
while
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pie
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the pie
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 charts compare three countries in terms of imported to the United States
fish
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 in 1988, 1992, and 2000.
Overall
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, it can be observed that the income from
fish
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 increased significantly.
Moreover
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,
China
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 contributed the least to imported
fish
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,
while
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 other countries made the largest proportion. To start with, in 1988 nations received from sales about 6.57 billion. Around 60% of
this
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 value was made up by Canada,
whereas
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China
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 and others accounted only for 13% and 27%
rsepectively
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respectively
.
However
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, by 1992, the percentage of Canada`s earnings had a 26% decrease, and the value of sourced
fish
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 by
China
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 and other nations increased to 20% and 46% of
fish
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 in the same order, which
overall
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 made nearly 8.52 billion. It is noticeable that in 2000 the
number of
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total income rose to 10.72 billion.
According to
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 the pie chart of
this
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 year, it is seen that the proportion of others remained the highest (42%).
While
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 Canada and
China
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 had a similar rate, about 30%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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