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Your friend asked you to find a par-time job for him/her to earn some money while studying. You found a job that might be suitable. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • Give him/her the job description • Explain why he/she should take the job • Say what he/she should do to get the job

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Dear Jane,
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! I have found a very good job for you. After several attempts and research, I was able to find an opening for a position in customer care role on Amazon, so, I am really happy to share
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 with you. As to the specifics of the job, since it would be remote work, you would be expected to respond to customers' complaints only on voice calls and emails, and
at the end
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 of each day, you are to give a detailed report to your supervisor on every activity that took place. Considering your current position as a student
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 your years of experience in Apple and Samsung working as a customer care relation officer. I believe beyond any doubt that you are qualified for
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 role.
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, I would advise you don't hesitate to apply for the opening. So, in order to get started, you can go to the nearest Amazon store to pick up an application form but more preferably, you can apply online on their website. After submitting an application, subsequent steps to be taken will be communicated to you via your email. I can't wait for you to get started with the job and would love to see you again. Warm regards, Moses

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coherence cohesion
Consider dividing the paragraph about the job description into separate ones to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Include more specific details about the job, such as work hours or potential benefits.
task achievement
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The structure effectively organises the content with a clear introduction, body, and closing.
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