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Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#nations #countries #relief #disasters
I totally agree with
this
 statement. In order to
this
 our resorbability to keep
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righ's
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 people in the correct way, wealthy
countries
 must assist all poorer
countries
according to
 natural
disasters
. On the whole,
in
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apply
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these days we are hearing about natural
disasters
 or damage
of
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to
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life
moreover
, there are poor
countries
 because climatic factors
effect
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affect
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on
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nations . To illustrate, as we know there are some regions that have a lot of natural
disasters
 depending on whether their humans will damage and die if the government does not help them.
For instance
, South Africa has huge problems
such
 as changing weather or very hot weather. In the same way,
this
 country doesn't have any resources. That's why other
countries
 have to assist them
also
, providing all
needs
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the needs
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 of
life
.
Above all
, the leadership of organisations should improve
quality
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the quality
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 of
life
 by resolving all problems and encourage other
countries
 to take all actions for any natural
disasters
 under these circumstances to increase people or nations to keep their
life
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lives
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 safe. Not only safe
life
 but
also
, contribute
for
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to
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 ues
alternative
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 as
discover
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 what a problem of weather.
For example
, the USA always encourages other governments to help poor nations in order to stand together and they are serving all news through
T.V
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TV
 to inform humans that
this
 is our resorbability .
To sum up
, I strongly believe that we must stand behind poor
countries
 and support them through
service
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 them as food or clothes .
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grammar
Ensure correct usage of grammar and avoid typos. For example, 'resorbability' seems to be a typographical error and doesn't fit the context.
coherence
Make clear and cohesive arguments throughout the essay to ensure the reader can follow your line of thought easily.
examples
Provide more detailed and relevant specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, instead of vaguely mentioning South Africa, give more concrete details about how it is affected by natural disasters and the type of aid that would be beneficial.
structure
Improve the structure of your essay by ensuring a logical flow between paragraphs and ideas. Make more effective use of transition words and phrases.
arguments
Clarify the main points and ensure they are well-supported. Avoid generalizations and give specific, detailed ideas.
introduction
The introduction mentions the writer's position, which is clear and concise.
examples
The essay provides specific examples such as South Africa and the USA, which supports the overall argument.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Humanitarian relief
  • Infrastructure
  • Global solidarity
  • Disproportionately
  • External assistance
  • Rebuilding efforts
  • Disaster response
  • Investment in stability
  • Dependency theory
  • Responsible intervention
  • Paternalistic
  • Shared humanity
  • Sovereignty
  • Capabilities
  • Fatality rates
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