Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I totally agree with
this
statement. In order to this
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people in the correct way, wealthy Change noun form
righ
countries
must assist all poorer countries
according to
natural disasters
.
On the whole, in
these days we are hearing about natural Change preposition
apply
disasters
or damage of
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to
life
moreover
, there are poor countries
because climatic factors effect
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affect
on
nations . To illustrate, as we know there are some regions that have a lot of natural Change preposition
apply
disasters
depending on whether their humans will damage and die if the government does not help them. For instance
, South Africa has huge problems such
as changing weather or very hot weather. In the same way, this
country doesn't have any resources. That's why other countries
have to assist them also
, providing all needs
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the needs
life
.
Above all
, the leadership of organisations should improve quality
of Correct article usage
the quality
life
by resolving all problems and encourage other countries
to take all actions for any natural disasters
under these circumstances to increase people or nations to keep their life
safe. Not only safe Fix the agreement mistake
lives
life
but also
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to
alternative
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alternatives
discover
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discovering
For example
, the USA always encourages other governments to help poor nations in order to stand together and they are serving all news through T.V
to inform humans that Correct your spelling
TV
this
is our resorbability .
To sum up
, I strongly believe that we must stand behind poor countries
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