The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The given table illustrates the
population
between 1980 to 2002 in
Australia
and
Malaysia
.
Overall
, both countries experienced
dramatically
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increase
population
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in population
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,
while
all these
proportion
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proportions
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of male,
female
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and female
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, birth
rate
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rates
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and average annual
population
growth in
Australia
and
Malaysia
remain
the
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apply
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almost the same percentage except
the
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for the
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population
aged over 65 which increased significantly. In 1980,
Australia
and
Malaysia
were considered almost the same total
population
which
is
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was
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14.7
millions
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million
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and 13.7
millions
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million
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respectively,
while
it
was
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climbed to 19.6
millions
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million
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in
Australia
and 24.3
milion
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million
in
Malasia
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Malaysia
by 2002.
Furthermore
, there were male,
female
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and female
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, birth
rate
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rates
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and average annual
population
growth which
are
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apply
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remained stable in both countries around
those period
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that period
those periods
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. Between 19080 to 2002,
Austrail
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Australia
and
Malaysia
experienced almost
same
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the same
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proportion of
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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around 49% to 50%.
In addition
, the birth rate of these two
countires
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countries
was considered declined between
this
period from 1.5% to 1.3% in
Australia
and dropped from 3.2% to 2.2% in
Malaysia
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, australia, malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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