The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.
The following bar chart represents the number of
an
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unidentified magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003, and 2005, with projected
sales
for 2007.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that
overall
magazine
sales
in
country
B
was
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the highest,
whereas
that of
in
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country
E was the lowest
thoughout
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throughout
the given time frame.
To begin
with, the fall of magazines' popularity can be found
in
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2005 to 2007 in
country
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countries
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A,
B
, and C
evenif
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even if
their
sales
are over 30
pieces
per individual.
In
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2003 to 2007,
although
country
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countries
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B
and C
experience
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similar figures of
a downward trends
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downward trends
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at an average of slightly below 50 magazines sold per person in
country
B
, that of
country
C fell down about 10%.
While
in
country
A decline in the same rate of reducing 5
pieces
and ending with 38
pieces
per person. In regards with, in
country
D has
a
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contrast
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trends. The
sales
constantly rose about 2-3
sales
starting with 18
solds
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sales
and reaching its peak at 23
pieces
.
However
, it is
intersting
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interesting
to note that
of in
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country
E
have
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a
fluctuate
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sales
, though they have the lowest
perchases
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percentages
compare
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with the
others
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four nations of less than 10
pieces
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, country, b, pieces with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Increases
  • Decreases
  • Comparison
  • Significant
  • Projected
  • Sales
  • Economy
  • Digital Media
  • Impact
  • Cultural Factors
  • Analysis
  • Future Trends
  • Market Conditions
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