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IN SOME COUNTRIES, THERE HAS BEEN AN INCREASE IN THE NUMBER OF PARENTS WHO ARE CHOOSING TO EDUCATE THEIR CHILDREN THEMSELVES AT HOME INSTEAD OF SENDING THEM TO SCHOOL. DO THE ADVANTAGES OF HOME EDUCATION OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES.

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IN AN EVER-PROGRESSIVE SOCIETY , HOMESCHOOLING IS NOW A NEW PRIORITY
WHILE
 STUDYING AT SCHOOL HAS LOST ITS SIGNIFICANCE IN SOME PARENT'S PERCEPTION. IN LIGHT OF
THIS
, I CONTEND THAT THE DRAWBACK OF DEFICIENCY IN PROPER EDUCATION STRATEGIES AND
TIME
 WASTING OUTWEIGH THE BENEFIT OF MORE CARE IS PROVIDED. IT IS VITAL TO UNDERSTAND THAT LACKING OF EDUCATION WILL SIGNIFICANTLY AFFECT OE'S CHILD STUDY PROCESS.
IN OTHER WORDS
, SOME
PARENTS
 MAY NOT MAJORED IN EDUCATIONAL FIELDS OR LACK SPECIALISED KNOWLEDGE AND TEACHING EXPERIENCE.
AS A RESULT
, THE POTENTIAL OF TEACHING IN INAPPROPRIATE DIRECTION WILL RISE. TAKING MY NEIGHBOUR AS AN EXAMPLE, THESE
PARENTS
 TRY TO PROMULGATE ACADEMIC LESSONS BUT
DUE TO
 LACKING OF SPECIALISED EXPERTISE, THEIR CHILD HARDLY EVER FULLY ABSORB THE LESSONS. SOME PEOPLE,
HOWEVER
, JUSTIFIED THAT
TAKING
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HOMESCHOOLING WILL BRING MORE EFFICIENCY AS THE
PARENTS
 CAN KEEP TRACK OF THE STUDY PROGRESS MORE CAREFULLY.
THIS
 BELIEF IS BASED ON THE COMMON THINKING THAT
PARENTS
 CAN ENSURE ALL THE NECESSITIES THAT THEIR SONS NEED.
THIS
 IS A CREDIBLE POINT, BUT TEACHING STRATEGIES NOWADAYS ARE PLANNED BY THOSE WHO ARE THE MOST INTELLIGENT,
THEREFORE
, THE STUDENT DEMANDS ABOUT HEALTH AND STUDY ARE ALL CACULATE SOPHISTICATEDLY. ANOTHER DISADVANTAGE WORTH CONSIDERING IS THAT PROMULGATING ACADEMIC EXERCISES AT HOME MIGHT OCCUPY MOST OF THE
TIME
. TO BE SPECIFIC, THE
TIME
 FAMILY MEMBERS SPEND ON EDUCATION WILL BE ENLARGED CONTINUOUSLY AS THE KNOWLEDGE TEND TO BE MORE AND MORE COMPLEX. AS THE NATURAL OUTCOME, THOSE WHO CHOOSE HOMESCHOOLING WILL SPEND MORE
TIME
 TO ENSURE THEIR CHILDREN FULLY GRAPSE THE EXPERTISE AND LOSING TO CONDUCT OTHER NECESSARY WORK. TO EXEMPLIFY
THIS
 STATEMENT, TAKING MY RELATIVES AS A REMARKABLE INSTANCE, MY CLOSE FAMILY MEMBERS HAD TO GIVE UP HOME STUDYING AS IT AFFECT SEVERELY TO FAMILY FINANCE. TAKING ALL POINTS INTO ACCOUNT, THE MERIT OF SUFFICIENT CARE IS OUTWEIGHED BY THE DEMERITS OF
TIME
-CONSUMINING AND USING UNSUITABLE TATIC.
THEREFORE
, IT HAS BEEN CLEARLY DEMONSTRATED THAT FAMILY MEMBERS SHOULD PRIORITIZE SCHOOL LEARNING.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • Finally
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