IN SOME COUNTRIES, THERE HAS BEEN AN INCREASE IN THE NUMBER OF PARENTS WHO ARE CHOOSING TO EDUCATE THEIR CHILDREN THEMSELVES AT HOME INSTEAD OF SENDING THEM TO SCHOOL. DO THE ADVANTAGES OF HOME EDUCATION OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES.

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IN AN EVER-PROGRESSIVE SOCIETY , HOMESCHOOLING IS NOW A NEW PRIORITY

WHILE

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STUDYING AT SCHOOL HAS LOST ITS SIGNIFICANCE IN SOME PARENT'S PERCEPTION. IN LIGHT OF

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, I CONTEND THAT THE DRAWBACK OF DEFICIENCY IN PROPER EDUCATION STRATEGIES AND

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WASTING OUTWEIGH THE BENEFIT OF MORE CARE IS PROVIDED. IT IS VITAL TO UNDERSTAND THAT LACKING OF EDUCATION WILL SIGNIFICANTLY AFFECT OE'S CHILD STUDY PROCESS.

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, SOME

PARENTS

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MAY NOT MAJORED IN EDUCATIONAL FIELDS OR LACK SPECIALISED KNOWLEDGE AND TEACHING EXPERIENCE.

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, THE POTENTIAL OF TEACHING IN INAPPROPRIATE DIRECTION WILL RISE. TAKING MY NEIGHBOUR AS AN EXAMPLE, THESE

PARENTS

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TRY TO PROMULGATE ACADEMIC LESSONS BUT

DUE TO

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LACKING OF SPECIALISED EXPERTISE, THEIR CHILD HARDLY EVER FULLY ABSORB THE LESSONS. SOME PEOPLE,

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, JUSTIFIED THAT

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HOMESCHOOLING WILL BRING MORE EFFICIENCY AS THE

PARENTS

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CAN KEEP TRACK OF THE STUDY PROGRESS MORE CAREFULLY.

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BELIEF IS BASED ON THE COMMON THINKING THAT

PARENTS

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CAN ENSURE ALL THE NECESSITIES THAT THEIR SONS NEED.

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IS A CREDIBLE POINT, BUT TEACHING STRATEGIES NOWADAYS ARE PLANNED BY THOSE WHO ARE THE MOST INTELLIGENT,

THEREFORE

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, THE STUDENT DEMANDS ABOUT HEALTH AND STUDY ARE ALL CACULATE SOPHISTICATEDLY. ANOTHER DISADVANTAGE WORTH CONSIDERING IS THAT PROMULGATING ACADEMIC EXERCISES AT HOME MIGHT OCCUPY MOST OF THE

TIME

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. TO BE SPECIFIC, THE

TIME

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FAMILY MEMBERS SPEND ON EDUCATION WILL BE ENLARGED CONTINUOUSLY AS THE KNOWLEDGE TEND TO BE MORE AND MORE COMPLEX. AS THE NATURAL OUTCOME, THOSE WHO CHOOSE HOMESCHOOLING WILL SPEND MORE

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TO ENSURE THEIR CHILDREN FULLY GRAPSE THE EXPERTISE AND LOSING TO CONDUCT OTHER NECESSARY WORK. TO EXEMPLIFY

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STATEMENT, TAKING MY RELATIVES AS A REMARKABLE INSTANCE, MY CLOSE FAMILY MEMBERS HAD TO GIVE UP HOME STUDYING AS IT AFFECT SEVERELY TO FAMILY FINANCE. TAKING ALL POINTS INTO ACCOUNT, THE MERIT OF SUFFICIENT CARE IS OUTWEIGHED BY THE DEMERITS OF

TIME

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-CONSUMINING AND USING UNSUITABLE TATIC.

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, IT HAS BEEN CLEARLY DEMONSTRATED THAT FAMILY MEMBERS SHOULD PRIORITIZE SCHOOL LEARNING.

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logical structure

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complete response

Develop your main points more thoroughly and ensure each point directly supports your argument. Some ideas feel partially explained, so provide more details or examples where relevant.

clear comprehensive ideas

The essay demonstrates a strong grasp of the topic and provides specific examples to support points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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325 words

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