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In some countries, citizens must pay a lot of money in taxes, but education and healthcare are free. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages

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In some countries,
education
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 and healthcare are free for citizens,
nevertheless
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, they have to pay a lot of
money
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 in
taxes
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. Now, I am going to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
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 situation.
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 with, I will describe the advantages of
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 issue.
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, it is a great idea. Some
people
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 do not care about themselves. Because they are so busy making
money
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. If they pay
taxes
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, they will go to the hospital. If they have a problem with their health,
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, in my country, more
people
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 are passing away from their health problems. Because healthcare is very expensive, most
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 cannot study at the university.
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 is because university payments are so high. Free
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 for the young generation. That means countries care about their local
people
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. That country's future is in the young generation's hands; if they study very well, that country will increasingly grow up in the future. Now we will see the disadvantages of
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 situation.
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, if they pay a lot of
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 in
taxes
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, they get free healthcare and
education
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 for their children or themselves. What if
people
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 do not have problems with health or do not have any children to educate? For them, paying extra
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 every month will be a waste of
money
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. In conclusion, I think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. It is a good way to pay more
money
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 than usual for
taxes
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. If something happens to us, we will be sure. We will have good care for free, and we do not have to pay any
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 for that.
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, for
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, we do not have to pay
money
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. I am of the opinion that.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that your essay is well-organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each body paragraph should start with a topic sentence and provide relevant details and examples.
Task Achievement
Provide relevant examples to support your main points. Avoid general statements by including specific details that directly relate to the advantages and disadvantages being discussed.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Equitable access
  • Public health
  • Literacy rates
  • Social inequalities
  • Government accountability
  • Standard of living
  • Financial burden
  • Taxpayers
  • Government inefficiency
  • Quality of services
  • Competition
  • Personal responsibility
  • Self-reliance
  • Overreliance
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