Questions 1. Some argue that all famous entertainment TV programmes shoulde contain education on social issues. *To what extent do you agree or disagree.

TV
is one of the most popular
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to use nowadays , it
provide
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information and entertainment . Many people now
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whether
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it's children ,adults and even
elderly
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the elderly
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enjoy watching television.
However
, not all
TV
programmes
educated
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their
viewers
even
they
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though they
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tend to make it more interesting and more entertaining by using and adding uneducated material. Basically , entertainment
TV
programmes
were made to entertain the
viewers
but they
also
have to educate the
viewers
by serving them with good
programme
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programmes
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. Many
TV
programmes
today, serve their
viewers
with
sentational
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sensational
news which is not
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very good material to serve. Remind their
viewers
not only mature people but
also
children can watch
that
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those
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programmes
too. They should give their audience
with
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more
well educated
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knowledge and it is not just for the famous
one
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ones
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but all the
TV
programme
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programmes
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should do the same thing.
For
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the
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conclusion I totally agree
for
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that
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TV
programmes
should contain education on social issues.It is for the sake of our future so that we can have
well educated
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well-educated
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generation.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Awareness
  • Engagement
  • Preachy
  • Thought-provoking
  • Reach
  • Integration
  • Social issues
  • Viewer retention
  • Entertainment value
  • Cultural impact
  • Mental health
  • Gender equality
  • Environmental protection
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