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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of people who visited overseas to three different areas in a Europe country between 1987 and 2007.
Overall
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, It can be seen that the coast has the most
visitors
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 at the beginning and over the period. The
number
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 of
visitors
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 to the lakes has fluctuated, and the mountains have been stable. The
number
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 of foreigners who visited the coast began at 40
thousand
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 in 1987, and declined to 35
thousand
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 in 1992,
then
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 rose significantly to approximately 75
thousand
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visitors
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 in 2007.
Furthermore
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, the mountain had
visitors
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 of 20
thousand
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 in 1997, and increased slightly to 35
thousand
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 in 2007.
In addition
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, the
number
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 of people who visited the lakes was 10
thousand
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 in the beginning.
Moreover
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 increased dramatically and hit a peak at around 74
thousand
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 of
visitors
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 in 2002,
then
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 decreased to 50
thousand
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 in 2007.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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