The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.
the graph shows the
number
of international tourists to three different European areas including the coast, the mountain
as well as
the lakes from 1987 to 2007.
to begin
with, in general, it is noticeable that the
number
of overseas
visitors
in all three areas has increased.
although
the
number
of
lake
visitors
went up rapidly until 2002 and
then
decreased sharply in 2007, but the sum of
lake
visitors
has been increasing compared to 1987. in detail, at the beginning of the year
in
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1987
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1987,
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the
number
of
lake
visitors
was the least, it is only around 10.000
people
compared to 20.000
people
who visited the mountains in 1987 and 40.000
people
who visited the coast in the same year. the tourists of to the mountains
has
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have
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risen
up
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slightly and constantly for the past 20 years and
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reached
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reach
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reached
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more than 30.000
people
. unlike the mountain tourist, the visitor or the cost has decrease from 1987 to 1992, begin with 40.000
people
and drop to 35.000
people
. but after that it remained increased until 2007, reaching 75.000
people
.
On the other hand
, the amount of
people
who visited the European
Lake
went up rapidly from 10.000 tourists in 1987 and reached 75.000
people
in 2002, but
then
it dropped to 50.000
people
in 2007.
overall
,
it is clear that
the
visitors
of to the coasts was the highest in 2007 and the
number
of mountain
visitors
in the lowest in the same year
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, lake, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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