The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

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the number of

airport

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passangers

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passengers

per year in three different

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airport

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in New York City from 1995 to 2000.

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it can be seen that the

visitors

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in all three airports has

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increased during the period.

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people

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in LaGuardia

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and Newark

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airport

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consistently

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, the visitor of John F Kennedy

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been fluctuating for the

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six years. in detail, LaGuardia

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the most passengers

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the beginning year which

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reached 35

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millions

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people

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and consistently

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number

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until 1999 to 50

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millions

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people

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rocketed to 70

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visitors in 2000.

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, the amount of

people

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who visited Newark

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in 1995

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, only 15

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millions

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people

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but it significantly

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to 40

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passangers

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passengers

in 1997 and remained stable until 2000. unlike the others, the

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people

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who visited John F Kennedy

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up from 25

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millions

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to 45

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in the first three years

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dropped to 35

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people

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in 1998 and 30

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millions

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people

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in 1999. thankfully after

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it climbed to

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45 million

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overall

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the end of period the LaGuardia

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almost twice more compared

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Vocabulary: Replace the words airport, people, millions with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "jump" was used 2 times.

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7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
41
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

229 words

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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

In a number of countries, some people think its is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Social media enable people to keep in touch with each other and learn about the news. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people seek a lot of advice from family and friends when choosing their career. Others feel it is better to choose a career more independently. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Directors and managers of organization are often older people. Some people say that it is better for younger people to be leaders. To what extend do you agree or disagree?