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The overuse of plastic packaging has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments can tackle these problems

Plastic
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 has been one of the most used materials in the modern world.
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, excess in its usage has created concerning issues
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 as tons of
rubbish
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 and ocean pollution.
This
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 essay will
further
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 discuss these concerns and suggest how governments can solve them.
Plastic
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 has certainly been one of the most useful inventions of the
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 century. The use of bags made with
plastic
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 is a good example of how
this
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 material can facilitate daily activities
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 as
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 groceries. Food packages ensure aliments are not contaminated by bacteria,
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.
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, after being opened most containers cannot be reused so they are discarded creating tons of
rubbish
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 that does not decompose easily, so they accumulate in disposal areas for long periods.
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, many
plastic
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 items are not properly discarded so they can end up in oceans which means they are a threat to maritime animals
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 cause a disbalance in the aquatic fauna . Those are problems that are really concerning in the current society and need to be urgently addressed. To solve problems related to over usage of
plastic
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, governments need to promote the reduction of
plastic
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 usage, seeking alternatives that are more eco-friendly and decomposable materials.
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 can be done by encouraging people to reuse packages and bags,
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 using paper and glass and banning plastics.
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, the establishment of laws that ban unnecessary
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 use and reinforce recycling policies
are
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 crucial. In Australia, these measurements are already happening and
plastic
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 bags are no longer available for free for the population
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 unless they are decompostable.
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, it is
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 imperative to make sure
plastic
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rubbish
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 is being recycled or properly discarded after leaving houses, so authorities need to create reliable recycling policies.
This
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 will likely be effective in solving some of the negative matters related to
plastic
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 overuse. In conclusion,
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plastic
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 is very practical for humans it causes a lot of problems for society
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 as excess
of
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rubbish
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 and ocean pollution. To tackle these negative issues is necessary to create policies and measures that ban unnecessary
plastic
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 , promote recycling and use more eco-friendly alternatives.

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task achievement
In the introduction, clearly state the specific problems caused by plastic overuse to set the stage for your discussion.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence that outlines the main idea of the paragraph to improve logical structure.
task achievement
The essay provides specific examples to illustrate the points, such as the use of plastic bags in Australia.
coherence cohesion
Both an introduction and a conclusion are present, which effectively frames the essay.
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