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Some people think that teenagers who commit crime should be treated the same way as adults criminals.To what extend do u agree or disagree?

#people #teenagers #crime #adults #criminals
There is no doubt that these days criminal activity has become more common than ever by any chance from
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 or young people.there is
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. In terms of criminals ,teenagers could do it from non since and
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 they dont have the right way to think or to be aware of the huge mistake they did but that doesn't remove the guilt on theme and
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 people who committed crimes against humanity and have a huge
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 on society. Because there
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 of age and the awareness of the danger they can do. The
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 should completely be different from each other ,it depends on the situation and the crime In
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 there should be
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 between the punshmeant for adult people and teenage children
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because
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 crime when
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 have a full awareness of
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,the opposite of
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 think of when
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 young age without absorption of there action and could come from a reckless thinking.
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