Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is, in your opinion, the most important thing to succeed in life?
In many societies, obtaining formal education is a necessity and parents tend to gauge children's capability from their
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succeeds
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prepared by the government and in my opinion, schools are not a place to gauge children's abilities in the future. Subjects that are taught Linking Words
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Based on the previous considerations, many have said that soft Use synonyms
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in addition
, there are a lot of soft Linking Words
skills
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as communication, adaptability and resilience. To be accepted in society, these Linking Words
skills
are important because we interact directly and we can not learn them theoretically. What's more, in a dynamic society, Use synonyms
people
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For example
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life
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skills
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, to climb higher positions, mentality and soft Linking Words
skills
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, it is important to have soft Linking Words
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, failing in Linking Words
school
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people
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life
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school
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knowledge
and it is up to us to implement it in daily Use synonyms
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. Because of that, the important thing to have is soft Use synonyms
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