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More and more plastics are polluting in world cities, countryside and oceans. What are the problems caused by plastic wastes? What measures should be taken to solve it?

#plastics #world #cities #countryside #oceans #plastic #wastes #measures
Needless to say, pollution around the world is getting more severe problems and we cannot neglect about it.
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pollution problems by plastic
wastes
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 and the solution
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. I will explain with regard to littering cigarettes. Littering cigarettes is one of the big issues
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causing pollution. Most
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smoker
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 would not take
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 problem as
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matters
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 since it is just a small litter for them. Many smokers are littering from the window of the car
while
 driving. A filter of cigarette is made of microplastics. Apparently, it takes
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decades to degrade to the ground and eventually, these litters will reach
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the ocean. Yes, it is a small litter,
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 it has been accumulated and become a huge litter.
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 problem so we need to change the regulations by government. It should be strictly prohibited littering and we should set
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 like Singapore.
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 I found out many people are actually not
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 how bad
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 it is. Once again, we need to approach individuals to educate
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environment
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 issues caused by plastic
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 as well. As we know plastics are polluting our earth and oceans.
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environment
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 problems by plastics and potential solutions. I believe if everyone makes small changes,
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 it could be big impacts and
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task achievement
Ensure that you fully address all parts of the prompt. Your essay focuses significantly on cigarette litter, which is good, but expanding on other forms of plastic waste would provide a more comprehensive response.
coherence cohesion
Develop your supporting points more thoroughly. For example, you could explain more about how cigarette filters contribute to ocean pollution or discuss other types of plastic waste.
language
Use a wider range of vocabulary and sentence structures to articulate your ideas more clearly and precisely.
language
Check for grammatical errors, such as „Most of smoker” which should be „Most smokers”. Pay attention to these details for a cleaner, more professional essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
You provide a specific example (cigarette litter) to illustrate your point. This adds depth to your argument.
task achievement
You propose clear solutions, such as stricter regulations and public education, which contribute to addressing the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marine life
  • terrestrial animals
  • ingest
  • leach
  • endocrine disruption
  • reproductive problems
  • economic costs
  • aesthetic concerns
  • accumulation
  • landscapes
  • legislation
  • policy measures
  • single-use plastics
  • incentivize
  • environmentally-friendly alternatives
  • public awareness campaigns
  • responsible consumer behavior
  • recycling rates
  • corporate responsibility
  • sustainable packaging solutions
  • plastic footprints
  • waste management systems
  • recycling infrastructure
  • waste collection systems
  • disposed of
  • recycled
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